music help! please read?
i wrote this song please tell me what you think! like what improvements and such i can make!!
watch the colors of the keldiescope
watch them fade to every shade of grey
we are all just the sum of everyone else
your bullets shoot me down
penetrating the sight of a true test
she bleeds for the words we speak
we’r watching
just watching
Woah oh! Woah oh!
the values of strength
are just to far away
Woah oh! Woah oh!
there will never be a day
Woah oh!
a refuge of love will be the savior
but only for today
we keep trying to come to the surface
your eyes judge me around
sentecing the idea of a new day
she screams the words we think
we’r destroying
always destroying
Woah oh! Woah oh!
the values of strength
are just to far away
Woah oh! Woah oh!
there will never be a day
Woah oh!
a refuge of love will save us
but only for today
watch the colors of the keldiescope
watch them fade to every shade of grey
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paler shade of grey- jewel??
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i think they are really good! no changes necessary. great job keep writing!
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Wow, thats really good! The only thing i can find to say is maybe you could word the last phrase differently since its also the begining, but i dont really know the tune so i cant really tell you if it does good. But i suggest you recod it on youtube(if your not allowed go to a movie maker and black out your face) so other people can Hear it to.
good job
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good anymore xxx
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wow thats really good
like when i read it i can see the keliedoscope colors, its really good
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omg I just sung it and that was the PRETTIEST song I have ever read!!!!! I love it!!! You should totally be a song writer.
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The misspellings are prominent but easy to fix. (I did that for you below.)
Other than that, the song is pretty good. It doesn’t seem to have as direct a point as some songs, but is fairly abstract, which is comparatively unappreciated, yet is, in my opinion and many others, a very respectable and beautiful form of art.
Watch the colours of the kaldiescope,
Watch them fade to every shade of gray.
We are all just the sum of everyone else,
Your bullets shoot me down.
Oenetrating the sight of a true test,
She bleeds for the words we speak.
We’re watching,
Just watching.
Woah oh! Woah oh!
The values of strength,
Are just too far away,
Woah oh! Woah oh!
There will never be a day,
Woah oh!
A refuge of love will be the savior,
But only for today.
We keep trying to come to the surface,
Your eyes judge me around.
Sentencing the idea of a new day,
She screams the words we think.
We’re destroying,
Always destroying.
Woah oh! Woah oh!
The values of strength,
Are just too far away,
Woah oh! Woah oh!
There will never be a day,
Woah oh!
A refuge of love will save us,
But only for today.
Watch the colours of the kaldiescope,
Watch them fade to every shade of gray.
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Very nice!
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omg that song is amazing…ur good keep writing..how do u write so good..any advice to song writng
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cool
I like the song
good job
Wish i could write
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lol i wish i could write like that. raw emotion! i like. was this written for someone? like through a really hard time? yeah i know what THATS like. =/ but yeah definitely really uplifting words (sort of), but definitely i could see teenage girls putting it as their little away messages haha with all the hearts. you know what i mean. asklfjl;sdaf
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This is pretty decent stuff. I like a girl who writes songs because, i’m a song writer but I write the music instead of the lyrics. If you want I can youtube a few acoustic stuff that can be good for your song. because i can see it as an acoustic song or a soft rock kind of sound
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oooo!! thats really great. Its kinda touching and more then just the basic, boring love song! Cool!!
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very nice song!!
I might have to use this for one of my songs lol
jk
but i do write music…you write lyrics alot?
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* Kaleidoscope
*Sentencing
*We’re
A little bit of incorrect spelling I could catch.
And the whole “Woah oh!” sounds kinda crappy, sorry but I’m being brutally honest.
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awww i like it… its cute
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Thats well good
well done
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Wow…. that’s really good, but I would be a little skeptical posting things like this on here if you wanted to actually get in the business. Someone could steal it and get it copywrited in their name.
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You should be a singer when u grow up, and then sing this song! I WOULD LOVE to hear it on the radio.
Love the lyrics, though some spelling mistakes. But oh well. Nice song.
I dont know any improvements you can make. To me, it’s awesome. (And another reason why i cant give any improvements, is coz i SUCK at writing songs. I’ve tried millions of time. So i dont want to have to wreck your song.)
Hehe.
GOOD WORK!
Can you make a video on Youtube, and sing this song??? I dont know how it goes. PLZZ!!!!
xOx Joy xOx